Comments : Verbal Graffiti

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Quick joke:

    "Soaking poetic wisdom into our brains"

    Whats poetic wisdom? You need to further what you mean by poetic. Why wisdom? Why is it soaking? LMAO. Love ya!
    ^^^HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAH i think igot this joke too..and may I add ? lol

    i have a problem with the syntax of ur poem, and the concept. you know some B.S degradation..and man i mean come on why why did u fertilizezion :P the conceptionininining of ur wordhaump lonkainans

    what ? u cant understand ?
    Quit writing!

    signature : D.T.F. :)

    now about ur poem...it rhymed so damn well............! i love the very 1st 3 words..
    the 1st stanza was impressing and adopted modern words, yet in a very well way. I just got too interested ..well done

    Most call it vandalism, some call it the arts,
    Masterpieces originating in faithful hearts.
    The finish of starts, poetics off the charts,
    Work of an artist? Or youth torn apart?

    Greatness from nothing impossible to create,
    Why hate or be irate at the hands of fate.
    Eyes that await poetic power to sedate,
    Lost in a fantasy unable to think straight.
    ^^^KARL..this is fantastic ..this is incredible and this is inspiring. Very true, we can never extract something from nothing, and we should never get affected by what cam by fate in the 1st place. and then the message u have sent..in the other 2 lines..i mean very true..i love the credibility of your poem

    Be quick witted, wicked, creative, speedy,
    Write whats in your heart, minds are greedy.
    ^^^ i suggest u to use a semi/ rather than a comma after hearts..the message will be taken in a different way.. THE right way..
    anyway not a big deal just a suggestion and YESSSSSSSss again u said a gd message.. it's only when we write by our hearts that we can sour while writing..
    wise lines karl.

    >>the 2nd lines changed the 1st message which i took. SO in essence the poem is FULL and rich..and well written..most of all unforced.
    I loved it

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Quick joke:

    "Soaking poetic wisdom into our brains"

    Whats poetic wisdom? You need to further what you mean by poetic. Why wisdom? Why is it soaking? LMAO. Love ya!
    ^^^HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAH i think igot this joke too..and may I add ? lol

    i have a problem with the syntax of ur poem, and the concept. you know some B.S degradation..and man i mean come on why why did u fertilizezion :P the conceptionininining of ur wordhaump lonkainans

    what ? u cant understand ?
    Quit writing!

    signature : D.T.F. :)

    now about ur poem...it rhymed so damn well............! i love the very 1st 3 words..
    the 1st stanza was impressing and adopted modern words, yet in a very well way. I just got too interested ..well done

    Most call it vandalism, some call it the arts,
    Masterpieces originating in faithful hearts.
    The finish of starts, poetics off the charts,
    Work of an artist? Or youth torn apart?

    Greatness from nothing impossible to create,
    Why hate or be irate at the hands of fate.
    Eyes that await poetic power to sedate,
    Lost in a fantasy unable to think straight.
    ^^^KARL..this is fantastic ..this is incredible and this is inspiring. Very true, we can never extract something from nothing, and we should never get affected by what cam by fate in the 1st place. and then the message u have sent..in the other 2 lines..i mean very true..i love the credibility of your poem

    Be quick witted, wicked, creative, speedy,
    Write whats in your heart, minds are greedy.
    ^^^ i suggest u to use a semi/ rather than a comma after hearts..the message will be taken in a different way.. THE right way..
    anyway not a big deal just a suggestion and YESSSSSSSss again u said a gd message.. it's only when we write by our hearts that we can sour while writing..
    wise lines karl.

    >>the 2nd lines changed the 1st message which i took. SO in essence the poem is FULL and rich..and well written..most of all unforced.
    I loved it

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Nicko

    I enjoyed reading this, indeed verbal graffiti, in fact I can imagine reading this on a wall somewhere. Indeed a lot rhyme within rhyme, which was your obvious intent, but that didn't detract from the piece..not to my mind..

  • 13 years ago

    by Nicko

    I enjoyed reading this, indeed verbal graffiti, in fact I can imagine reading this on a wall somewhere. Indeed a lot rhyme within rhyme, which was your obvious intent, but that didn't detract from the piece..not to my mind..

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    This was a very interesting poem. The title caught my eye, and I loved the topic. I've always admired graffiti, the nice art kind, but also think the ones with vulgar language are considered vandalism! It's nice to see your approach and analysis of such art... and I must say your rhyme scheme is VERY impressive. Great choice of words. Well done!