Comments : In The Car [double senryu]

  • 13 years ago

    by White Orchid

    I liked this poem!! It was awesome! I was waiting for you to put more poems on here. I like the two diff. angles too. Nice write. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Really like this poem by you Ben. Ive done both.. drove the car with the music blasting! .. ( usually when Im stressed out, HaHa) and with the music off :) when I'm contemplative :)) Very good write! Well Done & Keep penning :]

  • 13 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Nice. Both ways of driving sound good to me, depends on my mood. lol

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    A twist to what a senryu is suppose to be but you still followed the guidelines. It was interesting to get two different view points on how you wrote this poem. Great job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Thats cool.. one should be focused while driving... coz the life of other's also matter..
    well written

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I'm a head banger so you see where that leaves me. Dig your imagination and how you write the opposing stanzas