"Look at that guy beating the coffee table
and shaking my pepper grinder
as if his soul depended on it
or something"

"Or something" just flipping cracked me up, and I was laughing for the rest of the poem. This is great!

What a interesting way of writing poetry but I have to say that it is very unique and I am taken in by it. I love the great simplicity you use and how it's easy to understand exactly what you are saying and how you bring your poetry down to earth, sort of say. All in all this was a pleasure to read and I enjoyed it immensly. Great job and keep writing.

I have to say this poem made me LOL genuinely,

"Look at that guy beating the coffee table
and shaking my pepper grinder
as if his soul depended on it
or something"

I just imagine eyes rolling at this point, awesome humorous write with a great voice.

Ben