I found this so sad, and yet I can visulize music in the back ground bringing the whole thing to life.
rhyme, flow, and theme are brilliant. I hope you're working on a way into the game of rap. You would be awesome

This is really deep and sad
You got your message across with ease
keep it up
cause i think Nano got through all your gramatical errors :P
:)

You have delivered a lot of emotion I can relate to in this lyrical sad poem