The imagination with this poem is almost flawless. The image it projects for the reader is truly captivating. It drags the reader in and puts them in your place. Truly Amazing!

Great write Lieutenant Lyric!

This was good, yet I couldn't quite concentrate while reading this poem of yours. I think it was the long use of words, and then the shortness at the end. If you kept it to a shorter level, I may have been able to read it properly.
But then again, everyone's different.
Well done, anyway.

4/5.

I love how you describe everything. and this poem may have inspired me because im in such a writers block :) great write.

Wow big bro.
this is great.
i loved every bit of it.
this was an excellant poem....you got my vote.
5/5.!.

-Scarlett Ann

Wow....i so get this...thank you...i realy liked it :D

I love it...You are a talented writer