Perfect rewrite of this sonnet. Breathtaking. I have no criticism although -

'All that I felt,
was nothing less then love,
for I saw a heart of beauty
and thorns -'
^I'm almost positive 'then' should be 'than'

Otherwise, amazing work, there's no need to analyze this write. It's a winner for me.

"Mirage"

I have such a love for titles, ones that hold uniqueness and pull the reader into the write.

All that was
likened to an orchid,
slumbered 'pon my bed
^^
Wonderful opening words. You always have that one little part of you, that says I am Mel ... in each poem I read.
It sometimes may be, 'pon or lady beetles perhaps even a pastel tiger.
And that is what makes your poetry unique and breathtaking

While he tasted sweet,
I'd always taste sweeter -
for I could resist his mouth
but my mouth would never
resist a lamington.
^^^
I love this part too Mel. I had no idea what a lamington was until ... google.

and learnt the nature
of illusive comparisons.
^^^
Perfect ending !

Mel, I want to leave you a blissified long comment with my commenting every thing I liked and disliked but the only thing that comes to my mind after reading this poem is how amazing it is. I can see this published in a poetry book compiled with wonderful poets and can see myself reading it over and over and over again without getting sick of it. Your way with language, evoking emotion, everything just came as one into this poem and made for a masterpiece. This is worthy of a site win this week and it was perfectly worthy of the win in our club challenge.

Your work always seems to outshine your last and that is something to say because each one of your pieces has become one of my favorites on this site. Keep leaving me amazed for I love it. :)

Five.

Only the finest from you...like always...I don't even know what to say...they've said it all...breathtaking write... Love you..xx.

Nice work, Mel...although comparisons are illusive, we as poets have no other means to describe the characteristics of our muses, do we? And it makes for such entertaining verses!

well done,

5/5 Ingrid

They said his hair would be
as soft as silk and his
hands as sleek as leather,

for this stanza im giving you 5