WOW!! this piece was filled with so much hurt and sadness. the emotion just flowed and really portrayed an image of such deep hurt and pain.

I think for the opening line "Everyday, as time pass by" it would maybe sound better if you said "everyday as time passes by"- i mean its totally up to you but when you read it out loud i think that sounds more correct.

"Everywhere, people around me pointing fingers so badly,
And I ask why they've been so cruel to me,
Oh, they're so cruel to me,
Give me a reason.
But I'll get by with my head down." - this was seriously so intense, and i think that pretty much everyone can relate to that, we've all had those times where we feel so ashamed and feel like theirs something wrong with OURSELVES because society seems to single us out.

"Everyday, life keeps taunting me wherever I go," i absolutely loved that line, it was seriously so powerful!! and really deep. you managed to make such a huge impact in a simple sentance consisting of 8 words.

"I was so cruel to me,
I am the reason."- this was SO powerful and i could really relate to you so much!! over all i absolutely LOVED this piece!! great job and am really glad that you've written something new because it really is an absolute pleasure reading your wonderful creations.

This was...beautiful!
I KNOW, it sounds cheesy and dumb, but it truly was. I loved it(:

As Shellaine said, just about everybody can relate to the line "I try to get by with my head down"
I know I can relate.

This was fantastic(:

Peace(:
-Han

I liked this poem, would make a really cool song. Although I didn't like the last line it doesn't really fit. Well that's just my opinion. But my question is, why not use "but I'll get by with my head down" in the first stanza? Just wanted to know if there was a reason. But anyways, yes very good. I give it a 5! Just because I like you lol, j/k it's worth a 5.

Ruth

Very good! I like your detail it makes reading poems much more interesting! You have a way with words :) good job!

I really like this! I'm literally enjoying every poem of yours!! :) and yr such a sweet heart!!!

I've commented on this 3 times haha but i love it but i dont want you to be sadd i hope you still don't feel this way your really an amazing writer! I'm proud of you hun<3

Woàw
i love it so expressive poem
it just true and it shows how you really feel
nice write

This is really good...I could defiantly relate to this.

As heartrending as this is it is still amazing! Fantastic job, and so well written!

I like the title because it's really eye-catching. Evereybody has these moments when they're just asking why things are happening to them, the way they do or at all. It reminds the reader that the situation your poem will refer to is similar to one they've been in themself.
I like that you started the poem the way you did because time passing by is a really usual thing, which daily happens, so seems your heart beating slow to have become something usual. I think that's already really strong because usually special people that mean a lot to you will be able to increase the hearts pace, but obviously love either took that person from you or never gave you the possibility to meet them.
I like the use of repetition in this poem because it underlines the speakers frustration really well and the conclusion you came to, I didn't see that coming. I thought that this is a really well written, heartfelt and absolutely sad poem.

So deep and i can feel emotion in every words. Great job. What else can i say??