I liked the repeticion of 'you may... At each beginning of a stanze..because it gives the poem such a easy flow.... The poem really does reflect on the quote it was inspired by....a lot of creativity... And a lot of emotions :)
I enjoyed this beauty...truly heartfelt.. Welldone!

Thissssssss is amazing! Ok i Seriously could NOT do what you have done...Especially because I don't understand Shakespeare. But honestly, this was just amazing. If I left you a long comment it would just keep repeating "this is incredible", so I'm sure you get my point!

But hear my stressed voice
vivid at all times;
never try to catch this memory
or test its colors against weak wind,
for my love does not falter
unwilling to leave you hesitating.

^^ So powerfully stated. My favorite stanza!
A job well done! You really broke down what W.S. said :)
chels

You had a really great opening and then I kind of lost the flow at 'whose' in the second stanza, I felt like you trailed off to something completely different there. So perhaps you'll want to look over that?

Truly a beautiful write though, I love the quote, it reflects so nicely within your words. Sometimes you cant doubt the love you have for someone.