Comments : A Night-Time Wander

  • 10 years ago

    by Kiko

    I really enjoyed this, especially the stanza:

    "Men lie lonely,
    On humbled streets,
    Tucked in tightly,
    To cardboard sheets,"

    I have to admit, though, that the ending was a tad disappointing. With a poem this well-written and thought-provoking, it deserves a more powerful ending.

  • 10 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    I really enjoyed this poem =)
    The flow was perfect and the rhyming was consistent!
    Also the imagery you created was both simplistic and entrancing.

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    I liked this poem, you painted a picture and at first I wasn't sure where you were going to go with this.

    After about the cardboard box line I was starting to get it. You're very good at subtle hints in the poems you write.

    thank you for the comment and I always vote accordingly. I may write poem off emotion but base judgement off logic.

    Warm Regards,
    Shaun

  • 5 years ago

    by Em

    A really enjoyable piece with great rhyming.

  • 5 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi,

    the rhythm and rhymes are perfectly fit in every lines.

    very words are rolling into my tongue. .. nice piece. ..5/5 for this.

    Gel

  • 4 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    This has really great rhyming and flowed like water. An enjoyable read, relatable too.

    • 4 years ago

      by Bradley Peter

      Thank you, Mel. You're words are very kind. I've always rather enjoyed this piece - the second and sixth stanzas being my favourite.