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WOW!! Rania this poem is amazing.... I think it's my favorite! I really loved it from the beginning until the end... I love how you started it "I am a wide ocean of words; wild and deep" |
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The idea is okay here, nothing spectacular, it's simple which I like I guess. You have such a short thought here, I almost think you could add so much more between the lines you have to add more depth to the poem. The only line that didn't really work for me was - |
by Kiko
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I really like what you are saying here. |
by Sunshine
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Why not change to something like: "the ink in my pen dries up." |
by Blissful
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The title really caught my eye because I was left asking, "how can a ocean be speechless?" I wanted answer to me question :) |
by Blissful
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I love it now with the revisions you've added. |