I like this. it sounds like a song. i love it

Agreed with Kelwin. This indeed seems to have a musical flow. Im not sure if you write songs, but maybe you should try with this one.

This was my favorite of your pices that I read. It resonated with me. Maybe being as they recently have become my own thoughts.
Either way, good write. 5/5

I agree, you'd be good at writing songs. i like your work, very sad, but you can tell it comes from your heart. 5/5 good work hun. take care xx