Nice......i really get it......i can deffinately relate:D....keep it up:D

Its simple. It is the oppossite of what im feeling. Im feelng strong. Nice poem. I would suggest using stronger metaphors. One thing I learned from writing and music is that what ever art form one undertakes art is the ability to take control of someones emotions by using your mind. From the looks of that comment above you did just that. Write to move people. Great job. Ill see you in the club forums =)