Comments : Truth Hurts (collab with Rabea)

  • 13 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Alas, I may end up controlling
    the breath you free in your life,
    I, your biggest doubt,
    And You my biggest fear.

    *That was my favorite stanza. The lines really spoke to me and reminded me a lot of my relationship with some people now. I really liked this piece a lot. I think the two of you make a good team. I hope to read more collabs in the future. -Nik

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Aww.. wow! This is an interesting collaboration. It was different than both of your usual poetry, so hats off for trying something different!
    I like it - in some ways people do test the people they love to see if they're hold on and still stick by their side... I personally think it's mean to put someone through unnecessary pain! I like the way you portrayed this, because people do that all the time... It's important to understand how it feels and the other perspective... Well done to both of you my friends! =)

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Actually the poem speaks of keeping someone away from you and pulling back, because there is a truth that you dont want to sharewith them, because it wouldhurt them so badly.

    Thats why at the end we said..am the truth that you want be pleased to hear.
    :)
    thought to explain

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I might hurt you, make you cry
    make you wish you want to die ,
    perhaps to test how strong your are
    or to prove how weak I am.

    ^Should be 'you are' .. but a lovely opening.. wow. I guess I never thought of someone hurting us as a sign of them testing your strength or how weak you are. I think we get so tied up in the emotion of hurting that even though it's terrible for someone to hurt us, there's always that reason behind it.

    that honestly you won't be
    ^Did you mean to say 'honesty' if so, you wouldn't need 'that'

    Lovely write... the truth does hurt but there's always something to learn from it. Beautiful.