Realms of thoughts, images are scattered

*I'd change "are" to "lay"*

From the pot of wonders I behold
And as I lean down to collect the remains
A thin fine line was connecting them all

*The last line seems weird, I'd change it to "I find a thin line connecting them all" that way you're saying the same thing it just connects to the line above better*

It felt so wise yet freshly young

*Loved this line*

What is it that scent of mystery dazzling my head

*Take out "it" makes it hard to understand. Flows much better without it.*

What is it that emotion so beautiful so raw

*Same thing here, remove "it"*
That kept me tossing in my bed

*I'd change "kept" to "keeps"*

Remembering words, drawing portraits
Of men been aching, and women gone in vain
Always made me wonder if I lost them all
Or did I trade them for a drop of rain

*Really liked this stanza, Such strong and profound emotions.*

Is it true that heaven shall host no grief?

*LOVEDDD how you said this line. Wonderful*

To be embraced by hell and fed to the sinners
Leaving the graced all in envy
That they won't taste any of grief's shivers

*Another perfect stanza. That leaves me thinking and wondering. Very good*

Oh Sadness, you beautiful emotion
Thank you for standing by me
Without your eloquence, anger and fear
I wouldn't have been writing so effortlessly

*I really enjoyed this poem. Just watch your word placement sometimes and you'll do just fine. You have a good handle on your emotions and where to place them so that's good. Great poem. -Nik*

What an interesting poem ..

This poem describes a new way of looking at sadness, you gave sadness a new meaning, you made it optimistic rather than the cliche meaning it implies ...

Amazing ..5/5

Realms of thoughts, images lay scattered
From the pot of wonders I behold
And as I lean down to collect the remains
I find a thin line connecting them all
^^^ Excellent stanza! The images of your life, and you are the line

It felt so wise yet freshly young
What is that scent of mystery dazzling my head
What is that emotion so beautiful so raw
That keeps me tossing in my bed
^^^ Even better! It is the zest and yet the sense of non-fulfillment that keeps us on our edge.

Remembering words, drawing portraits
Of men been aching, and women gone in vain
^^^ men been aching should be worked on. I will not make a suggestion, because your talent does not need one.

Always made me wonder if I lost them all
Or did I trade them for a drop of rain
^^^ Yet in the desert, one might think a drop of rain worth much, if not enough; but after it has been absorbed, is not the need even greater?

Is it true that heaven shall host no grief?
To be embraced by hell and fed to the sinners
Leaving the graced all in envy
That they won't taste any of grief's shivers
^^^ Your thought is incomplete. It appears that you are either sacrificing your own chance for heaven, or perhaps choosing to experience the fullness of grief even if it means giving up heaven. Perhaps do something with 'To be' so that it directly indicates your position.

Oh Sadness, you beautiful emotion
Thank you for standing by me
Without your eloquence, anger and fear
I wouldn't have been writing so effortlessly
^^^Very good, again. You will sooner or later be scolded by various poets here to avoid capitalizing each line. I'm old school, myself, and that's how I always did it. On the other hand, once I tried it their way, it made sense. Turns the poem into a message instead of a format.

Perfectly written, Maze.
I loved how u penned ur sadness within beautiful words.

Oh Sadness, you beautiful emotion
Thank you for standing by me
Without your eloquence, anger and fear
I wouldn't have been writing so effortlessly

My fav stanza..u appreciate sadness for helpin u write wz no much effort.That was unique .<3
Keep it up, man;)

As Lady Nik found, I too was left "hanging" on the "...thin line" connecting the pots.
But I enjoyed the flow of the overall work. I would consider the above comments quite seriously, as I feel your poems are all full of great phrases, but they often leave the reader 'hanging by an unfinished thread'.
Don't take as an insult! You are a poet.

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

U mature enough in ur thoughts.
I found a sens of realization in ur words.
I wud like 2 read more n more n more such beatiful thoughts in future.gd luk
dr.sidra

Tres bien
well done i really liked that one but its pretty sad