Comments : Incompetent

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    This is short and (not sweet haha) but very sad. I think one thing that's important here is the beginning that shows the "label". It's as though people are labeling you, and it's clearly in the wrong way. It could be because of your age, your religion, the way you were raised, where you live, what you decided to study, the way you speak etc. TONS of different opportunities here.

    The second stanza shows me that it maybe really DOES affect you on the outside, but deep down you know who you are and you aren't going to let them bother you more than just a little, because they are incompetent. I don't think you are saying YOU are the incompetent one, rather the morons who are judgmental and have their heads up their butts.

    I love this! One thing I would change, though, is don't make "sorry" capitalized. :) Thats all!

  • 12 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Worn like a stitch of old wool
    sticking to a piece of rag.
    ^Interesting simile here. Makes me feel like you don't feel appreciated at all, rather than what you really intended for the poem to be about. Just my interpretation.

    Really interesting little piece though. I find myself taking something different from this poem, but that's the beauty of poetry.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jad

    Well, I really love the shortness of this piece because it packs a lethal does of sadness that I LOVE!!! Anyway, the message of the poem perfectlly suits the title and your word usage shows how you feel so useless and not wanted. You really know how to stab straight to the heart of a problem and describe it so well!

    Proudly ineffective;
    worn like a stitch of old wool
    sticking to a piece of rag.
    ^^^
    I agree with temps that I love the simile here. Its shows how you feel so useless to be a stitch for only a simple rag. Your emotions are so deep and sad and I love where you are going with this poem. Awesome opening by the way!

    How Sorry, I am.
    ^^^
    Okay, and you killed me. My heart stopped as I read this and I didn't really cared if it started again because this was simply amazing. :] Also the second to last stanza was good as well but I really wanted to put empahsis on that last part.

    Overall, I loved this poem because it packs soo many emotions and it really spoke to me and I could so easily relate to it. Your imagery was creative and as always very lively. I hope you continue to write poems that give me soo much impact. Great job and keep writing!