Comments : Miracles

  • 12 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I always adore your references to nature. I like how you've always carried those throughout many of your poems, the usage of trees, the wind, the shores, etc. That really is what makes you the poet you are, I feel. The one unique thing that you carry through your poetry every time.

    A truly beautiful yet sad away of expressing this thought of missing someone and wanting them to come back to you. I loved how you started and ended the poem with 'come again' I found that rather effective and drove home the idea that you miss them and wish to see them again.

    The title definitely reflects the poem in it's entirety. It seems like it would take a miracle to have them back again, thus it's sort of just a dream to us.

    A beautifully sad poem, loved it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jad

    The poems strength was very impressive and I love how you went about writing this poem. The way you try to envision getting another miracle is truly impressive and unique. Your words are easy to understand and you write with a maturity that shows unique and creative metaphors. The use of imagery is always apparent in your poems and it keeps the poem alive with all the pictures that pass through my mind as I read.

    Come again, be a sight I desire wrapped in
    a further unforeseen summer,
    something to grant me a moment to believe
    in the entire condition outside my window,
    trees meeting in rows trying to reach
    ecstasy beyond faith.
    ^^^^
    Goodness, do I love this opening! :] You get right into the poem and your title becomes easy to understand with the message of just your first line.

    Breezes that I call for, mumbling laughter
    of children whom lips split as springs
    release shy rivers.
    ^^^^
    I really loved the imagery of the children and also the nature you linked it to. I thought that was very poetic. :]

    Unaware of my refusal...act like you are
    unaware of my refusal! Cleanse my denial
    with a slap of cool winds that stumble
    over the warmth of my face-almost like
    a tired wave resting at the humid shorelines
    when the sun uncertainly travels the second
    half of the world
    ^^^^
    I really thought of this as the end of the poem thought I really loved the last line you threw in there. I really liked it. :] The imagery and the emotions is so evident and it pours out abundanly in all you lines. :]

    All in all, I was really taken away with this poem from start to finish. Your message carries over verese to verse. Your maturity as a writer is very high and you write as a professional with your intricate emotions and metaphors that you weave into your poems. Great job and keep writing! :]

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... this poem gave me such a happy, good feeling. I love the theme and meaning of it. I love the cyclical structure, you began and ended with "come again" it fit the poem perfectly. As always, I just love the imagery you create through your words. This poem was like a breath of fresh air. Extremely well done!

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    "when the sun uncertainly travels the second
    half of the world"

    Umm, hello...Sunshine? This is friggin incredible. I think this is the most interesting way to say during the middle of the night that I have ever read in my life. That was brilliant.

    Such a sad tone I get from the "come again" in the beginning and the end, like you're alone but shouldn't be because of all that surrounds you.

    You wrote such a descriptive piece here, it's like I was in the middle of this poem experiencing every sense with each line I read. It was amazing.

    I love the use of "mumbling" with laughter, today being the first day of summer, it gave me the sheer excitement of the summer days when I was a child, playing at the river and messing around in the sun.

    This brought back many memories. Beautifully written!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    The imagery and use of language throughout this piece is wonderful. Another excellent piece!