Do you know that my boyfriend is Indian? This poem carefully defines my sentiments and the heartache my boyfriend and I go through, and the inner battles we face alone. It is so hard to love someone from a different culture, especially when their family is inflexible and hellbent on tradition. Anyway, before I start rambling... love the poem, it touched me deeply. You have such a wonderful way with words. My one complaint is the poem ended way too soon, I was ready to be taken on a much longer journey if you had given me the words to read.

Very nice poem 5/5

I have to admit that I didn't bother to read on when I began with your first stanza, as they were full of facts that are also known without the help of a poem. But there was something about your emotions in this very same stanza, the sadness that you deliver with the oh-so negative "not's" and the last two lines that suddenly take you away from these geographical facts. When I read it, I knew there was something personal going on. Thence I began to appreciate the facts you stated in this very same stanza, as they create a lovely contrast between the rest of the poem, making the last two lines of the beginning stanza so much stronger.

I really like the way you said
"I felt like my heart was intended to be
his homeland."
^ because it shows how much you care about him and his background. The fact that you even feel like your heart belongs to the country he's from, is touching.

The third stanza consists of another lovely contrast. As you juxtapose the colour of his eyes, his India, to his emotional states. Those seem to be swingy and untameable, just like the rage of a river.

After these lines, you seem to focus more on your own emotions rather than his, and I think that's what makes this poem so strong. You talk about both yours and his emotions, making the poem versatile.

Really powerful ending, with its rhyme, its lovely "dear" and its repetition of "India" to refocus on the whole scar in the relationship.

This was indeed a very worthy win, congrats!

I have to admit that I didn't bother to read on when I began with your first stanza, as they were full of facts that are also known without the help of a poem. But there was something about your emotions in this very same stanza, the sadness that you deliver with the oh-so negative "not's" and the last two lines that suddenly take you away from these geographical facts. When I read it, I knew there was something personal going on. Thence I began to appreciate the facts you stated in this very same stanza, as they create a lovely contrast between the rest of the poem, making the last two lines of the beginning stanza so much stronger.

I really like the way you said
"I felt like my heart was intended to be
his homeland."
^ because it shows how much you care about him and his background. The fact that you even feel like your heart belongs to the country he's from, is touching.

The third stanza consists of another lovely contrast. As you juxtapose the colour of his eyes, his India, to his emotional states. Those seem to be swingy and untameable, just like the rage of a river.

After these lines, you seem to focus more on your own emotions rather than his, and I think that's what makes this poem so strong. You talk about both yours and his emotions, making the poem versatile.

Really powerful ending, with its rhyme, its lovely "dear" and its repetition of "India" to refocus on the whole scar in the relationship.

This was indeed a very worthy win, congrats!

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Awesome poem rania....i loved it from himalayas to kanyakumari :p oh lol
Oh haha...wonderful poem

But really very nice poem... I really don't have words right now...like always caught with the disease of spinelessness....ha ha
Awesome poem...your friends probably loved it :)

Haha....okay so this is the reason why you think or thought 90% of Indian were kind and humble.... :p
does your good friend know you wrote this??? O.o

Still deeply inlove with this