I've been wlking through the desert
i was lost and had nowhere to go
then suddenly i heard someone calling
the voice came from behind
i turned around to see who it was
nobody was there and i wondered where it had come from
i started to walk again but i could still hear the voice
i looked back once again and found an old paper
i was surprised at what i saw on the paper
it was a treasure map but am not sure because i dont know of its origins
thus i embarked on my journey to seek out the truth
the journey was terrible
i fell many times, got hurt by bad weather
and injured myself
blocked by a complicated path
and managed to escape from traps while i fought monsters on my way
but i prevailed and reached my destination
where i found a beutiful treasure box which i opened
i was filled with happiness because of the treasure i had found
the map was indeed true
for i will now live happily ever after
this story expresses my true love story
from the start to the end,
it has told of my journey to have you as mine
i hope you understand and make my story come true.......

was just to edit it for you, hope you like my suggestions

Its a lovely story..i tried making those suggestions for you...

Thanks for your suggestions, i'll try better next time. (y)

Just that it was grammatically incorrect in some parts thats all but its a great piece

Yeah i'm studying english too, so maybe there's some gramatic mistake. btw, thanks