Is There Perfect Love

by LockedAway   Jul 15, 2011


You are kind to me
You say you love me
You show me just how much you care
I try to be the same in return
But life has a way of changing things

You can try your hardest
Making life work
But it never ends up the way you want it to be

I couldn't believe my eyes when you walked in the door
I was happy until you turned around
You had a knife in your back
You fell to the floor with tears falling out of your eyes
You said "I love you and I'm sorry"
You fell out of my arms and onto the floor
You had died in my arms
I cry tears of blood it hurt so bad
The blood slowly seeped out of the wound
And onto the floor

I lay down on the floor and take the knife from him
I then plunge it into my chest
With pain shooting every where
The pain of looking my love was worse than the stab Itself

I never loved again for i feel into a deep sleep
Of sadness which there is no coming out of

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To all those who feel there is no reason to live after the death of there one true love.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Sad poem but a good one. The wording was simple but good and it flowed nicely.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by RadianceInReverse

    You definately have grown with your poetry. But still I see somethings that you could improve on: 1: better use of diction(words) try using different words that mean close to the same thing. 2: your flow has improved but is still lacking try using words that flow better together and more punctuation. 3: always read your poem over and over until you are 100% satisfyed with what you have written there is no such thing as a perfect poem and only you can decide if its complete 4: DO NOT DOUBT YOURSELF you are a talented writer and dont let anyone EVER tell you differently! 5: Never force your poetry let it all come naturally if you for some reason cannot finish a poem dont force an ending let it sit awhile or try rewriting it that always works for me <3

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow, this is insane. But really good. Fantastic job.

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