Comments : Angels On The Moon

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    The opening stanza is beautiful and matches the title.

    "Can you see beyond the stars
    Beyond our galaxy afar
    I see it there
    I can feel their stares
    It's angels on the moon."

    The wordings would be more connected and realistic, if the first 2 lines were connected to the "angels on the moon".

    "They whisper in my ear
    Telling me not to fear
    There's angels on the moon."

    These 3 lines are simply beautiful and soexpressive

    "Don't care about the little things
    Cause i won't let you fall."

    These 2 lines are also very nice, but could be even better, I feel.

    "They whisper secrets i don't wanna know.
    They tell me when life ends,
    And i don't wanna know.
    Their the angels on the moon"

    Again very nice, with abstract meaning. Their is not grammatically correct, but perhaps reflective.

    "Their here to guide me.
    So don't wake me cause I'm dreaming,
    Of angels on the moon."

    The last 3 lines are the best, a beautiful ending to an eye catching poem and title.