As this poem is abt a prsn who feels unlucky n lonely al d time ...u hv gvn grt value to those emotions in d strt ,,but at d same time u knw me i like positive endings nd u did it well by saying

I may be alone;
In my life comes
stone after stone
but I won't give up..

excellent wrk ,,,jus like u always do ,,cnt say abt othrs ,,,bt fr me its one of ur best ...

Oh wow, this blew me away. Done so very well, the wording led us straight through your problems with a lot of emotion. Excellent
Connie

Wow! This is amazing! Though I am so sorry. Wow.

Wow this is amazing, its shows a whole life story i love it 5/5

I cud feel myself as the persona his plight,pain hit me so dearly.its a gud piece.am reali touchd.kep writin

Really good jenni reali unique the flow was really amazing cant fault it :) 5/5

All i can say great job

This was so well-written, sweetheart, if I had more votes, I would nominate this but sadly...:/
I would show up once again to suggest few things but not now, because I'm so busy. :)
Love you.
Take care.

A few weeks
after my birth
daddy speaks
mom left earth

Why did she
have to die
Why not me
saying bye

I now live
with my dad
please forgive
don't be mad

It's my fault
that she's gone
you assault
me, for what've done

She was weak
that season
Now I seek
for reason

Wow, this top half of the poem is deep. I love how it was short lines yet so much meaning and powerful behind them! Also the flow was very well written!

I see hate
in your eyes
you say straight
I'm to despise

Makes me pale
yet it's right
you're in jail
be contrite

A family
that just cares
welcomes me
to be theirs

I didn't have
sis or brother
family lists
father and mother

I'm really sorry this happened to you but I love how you keep the hope and knowing that it was not your fault.

Why does bad luck
follow me only
hit by a truck
again, I'm lonely

Frustration
is what mom feels
this situation
cannot be real

her new friend
numbs her soul
for pain to mend
it's the alcohol

Again, nice flow!

They took me to
an orphanage
I've been through
too much to take

Four years passed
my dad was free
who once harassed
now takes care of me

A change of heart! Awesome piece!

My grandma
didn't feel well
with what she saw
me going through hell

She wanted to save
what was left of me
That's why I crave
with her to be

God loves her dearly
Their eyes on me
which shows clearly
no reason to flee

I may be alone;
In my life comes
stone after stone
but I won't give up.

I love the ending! Still having hope through everything the reading had been through. Great work! Keep it up! Smile!!! :)

Very moving and powerful. I felt all the emotion here. Keep injecting that passion in your work.

Its a great poem about loneliness and emotion and ending is perfect
its a gud poem ....