Comments : What's wrong with me?

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    Great poem!
    I love the use of questions
    You have used many powerful words that I can relate too!
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    This is happening with me too girl! We loved them so much && they tore us apart, & even though we found someone new they wont leave us nomatter how hard we try. I'm dealin with it right now. But i LOVE this poem, so true, with strong emotion.<3
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Had been there, too. :)
    A very sad piece you've penned here, your feelings are instable.

    Tears run down my checks
    ^^^

    Checks = Cheeks ;)

    Who I like alot.
    ^^^^
    alot = a lot

    If u still have it.
    ^^^
    u = you

    Hope you take by them ;)
    Good luck.

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Very strong dynamics here: the broken trust, the new, hopefully trustworthy one, yet you can't get the bad boy out of your system. If you use your works to learn more about yourself, try writing a follow up poem from the point of view of the cad who you had to give up.