This was such an emotional piece from you. I couldn't help but feel my eyes begin to burn a little while reading.. If this wasn't a true experience then your imagination is too understanding of reality, the emotional impact has left something upon me and I know this will be one of those poems that I continue to go back to and read again and again.
On a second note, it's nice to see something new from you and something different. This piece was you Lu, different yes but it held all the aspects you use to form beautifully poetry. First of all you connect with your subject, no matter what it is, person, nature and object, you have this ability to connect and see things others don't usually see. Secondly it has your warmth and tone, strong as always yet subtle hints of your own pain throughout. The tone is always soft like that of a mother and it soothes
me when reading as strange as that may sound. Perhaps I'm a little home sick at the moment and missing my mum but even when we chat you manage to ease my mind. The style was what impressed me most, it was unique to you because it was simplistic yet poetic at the same time.. I loved it.. It's by far one of the most interesting I have read from you in a very long time.
"And ... as sure as tomorrow's forecast for sun
with a chance of rain would be a 50/50
I too was both wrong
This said enough for me, it was showing you Lu, you and how you always think of others. I can't say much more than thanks for sharing. A beautiful piece as always.
I don't know what to say after reading this, I have no witty comments or helpful suggestions. I am still trying to catch my breath from a poem that stole the air from my lungs.
Superb is all I can say
8 years ago
So here I am giggling at your alliteration, basking in your imagery and absorbing in every line, and you hit me with heartbreak. This was so unexpected! I kept reading the first few stanzas trying to figure out where this was going, because it wasn't quite adding up or making sense yet, until I hit that ending.
Very emotional and touching poem, Lu. I'm in tears.. yeah you know me, cry baby. lol. This was beautifully written and I feel only a mother could write a poem quite like this. It had that motherly instinct and motherly feel to it that I just adore.
I really like how you had the wrong/right. Normally people say they were both right and wrong, but you pulled it around and made it different. I liked that :)