Short but love it.

you can see her laying out in the desert alone & in the cold

great job
5/5 :)

Aww i love this poem
it reminds of me sitting alone

Very good! i love it! you can just picture the girl sitting there....all alone

good job!! 5/5

Wow, imagery is excellent here. I love how well you have given a scene with so few words. The word choice is immaculate, since there are so few, but they convey such a strong story. 5/5 for sure

I like the fact that this is short but the imagery and words are well-chosen

I love it Tyler. I love how it is short but it makes perfect sense. 5/5 Great job. Love ya Tyler :D

Great job tyler<3 i really felt the emotion in this poem<3katie

I feel so alone at times i like this poem short and sweet love it :) Tyler

Where loneliness bangs, guard loosens. Within unity, lies freedom.

All of this bloody murder,
Because someone desert her.

^ just curious but shouldnt desert be deserted her?

other than that even for a short piece this is well done. great job.