Interesting poem you've got here,Colm. Not your usual style but I'm loving it. I thought the poem was effective because, it used repetition, alliteration and rhythm, the poem is well structured and uses good use of metaphors.

Interesting poem. Sad enough, and honest in many ways, I think..

I liked the images here, the thoughts, the repetition, and the smooth flow.. It felt..cozy?

:)
5/5

Truly sad and amazing.

5/5

-Heather