And you
post and tweet
and re-tweet and quote
my feelings
so cynically.

^ interesting Yaki, and tyour comment is just amazing also. Yes, I do believe so. I do believe.

Is that you are not
content to see
they are healthy..
^ I think this is the only lines I whcih I didnt like because it seemed to simple and werent worded in a poetic manner.

ALso, if I had to choose, I will probably change the title from 'Pretend' to Pretentious' this way, the title sounds a little intriguing.

Other than than, as usual this is another brilliant and creative piece from you. I loved how you connect each imagery and description to the other. The author's note made this piece even more fascinating.

Keep rocking girly!