Comments : Winifred Montague

  • 9 years ago

    by abracadabra

    What a rugged little beauty. The hurried, nervous tone was well conveyed, especially with use of little punctuation. Great selection of detail, wonderful narrative and character development. Heartwringing ending which was what clinched it for me. "shinny" must be 'shiny'? And 'Klms' is normally just 'km', but leave it if you want your mark there. In fact, I love poets who have trademark language and themes in their writing, especially those of their personal location. I appreciated recognising the Melbourne streets and buildings, though I understand some of the context must be ficticious. I would have gotten off at Parliament. Haha.

    Well done, matey.

  • 9 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Dude.... this is pretty great. It had me feeling nervous and shaky in the dodgy surroundings. Your descriptions were great.

  • 9 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    A monument to the art and craft of
    creative poetic writing..
    spine-tingling without being the
    least bit gratuitous..
    Bravo!

  • 9 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Shifty, dirty, city hubbub scenes - gotta love it. Also gotta love your distinct Australian accents and wording that lifts off the page.
    Way to paint something raw and vivid, man. You've got a signature. Props.

  • 9 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Oops, that was me, Jane ^

  • 9 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    I seriously admire this piece.

  • 3 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I am in awe of this piece. Outstanding work.