I have to say this is one of the best poems I've read on here in a very long time. It drew me in right from the start. It was captivating and flowed smoothly from line to line.The only thing I felt was a little off was the final part of the last line in the third stanza. The rhyme was a bit off, it was subtle but I felt it was a little off. The lines were good in and of themselves but as a couplet like you have in all the other stanzas they didn't quite fit. Where as I thought you did very well with making the rhyme of time and fine work in the first stanza. They weren't an exact match but they fit nicely together when used how you used them. The piece was full of true emotion and you wrote it so the reader can feel that emotion too. I have to say ultimately the first stanza was my favorite, and the second came in a close second. Wonderfully done, and great usage of repetion and alternating some of the repetion so it wasn't overdone. All I have left to say is it is a beautiful piece. 5/5