I didn't read this from the marathon, was it from there? This is beautiful nature poetry!! I really, really like this! I love the use of 'ornate'. It worked so well here!

This is amazing. It describes it perfectly. Short, simple, and too the point, yet not too short to leave out anything important, and not too simple not to grasp attention. Great piece

With few words you penned a wonderful image of fall. Excellent

Just putting 'crunch' alone in the third line makes the reader hear the sound! Great..

And in such festive shades of orange and yellow,
I find it ironic that this
is how
they
die

^ And the shape of this also gives the image of death..

Brilliant, Nevi.

Nevi,*

I love your short pieces, you put so much into them when you write. You manage to get the imagery down, a lovely tone, and intriguing concepts. Of course I was fond of the imagery behind this poem. I love to incorporate nature into my poems especially when they reference something larger, here you referenced the idea of death.

Not sure if it was your intention but as you know nature is alive just like we are, so this poem to me became a metaphor for life and the human. Especially when you mention ornante, the human body is definitely ornate. When you spoke of falling to the grown I imagined the death of a person, one minute we're standing and the next laying.

I like how you called the colours of yellow and orange festive, some symbolism sparked the mind.

A lovely little piece.

-Mel

Love it

Well done short but meaningfull keep up
liked it :)