Comments : Another Day

  • 12 years ago

    by Jessie

    Really good poem, had good rhyming that didnt seem forced to me.... The only thing i would suggest is changing the word zombie from this line

    "What's the reason to exist,
    When your gone and never truly missed,
    Another day inside this place,
    Left with a zombie of a face"

    I feel you could have fond a better word that would have a better effect and really tie off the poem

  • 12 years ago

    by Staind Soul

    Yeah it was something I just put together really fast without really thinking about it