Comments : Let me be...

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    I like the flow and message of this poem.
    It was really sweet and displays an inner love and devotion for someone that you care about.
    I like the repetition of the words let me be it really is a great poetic device displaying emphasis on the significant messages of the poem. I think your ending was a nice way to end the piece. I nice and easy read :) thanks for sharing 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    You really poured out emotions here. Lucky be the guy for whom this was written. I hope he deserves his love.

    My only suggestion, the last stanza suggests a little possesiveness, perhaps to the reader. If I was to write this one, I would use something such as :

    Let me be...
    Just let me be,
    Your only love when no one else cares for you

    and ending with a punch line:

    I will never abandon you, my love

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Amazing beautiful wonderful I loved it :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Lovely poem robin..
    Ful points..