Comments : Pieces of my heart

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    An amazing poem hun!

    I love the force of emotions you have shown in your writting. The words are really strong and you can tell that you got completely hurt by this person

    I love poems like these where you can get to vent a little. It's like a release as each line you write - feels as though you are telling the person directly

    Trying to remain strong,
    reminding myself you let me go,
    you wouldn't hear me out,
    wouldn't give me a chance to explain,
    how can you just throw our love away
    after everything I forgave you for?
    Do I really mean that little to you?

    I'm sorry, I'm sorry, how many
    times do I have to say it?
    It never should have happened,
    one huge mistake that got taken
    to a completely different level,
    I gave you that chance you begged for,
    and you can't do that for me?

    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

    I love these two stanzas

    You can tell you've done so much for this person and forgave him for doing you wrong and he still treats you like this

    I love this poem hun, well done

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by aanika R I P

    Whole poem is awesome,but this part simply touched my heart, so well i can picture out these emotions....

    "Pieces of my heart slowly
    falling apart, hitting the ground
    with a loud crash shaking the floor,
    tears streaming out my eyes,
    shaking from the pain,
    I can't believe this is happening."

    brilliant work as always.... <3 :)

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Agree with all the coments above the fact its really feelings make the poem so powerful 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by anonymous

    Aww so much emotion i love it!!! keep your head up though some boys come and go and he is just one of those.. your true love is out there
    100/100 :)