I was hooked from the beginning..i dint know what to expect at the end but it exceeded my expectations..great ending...5/5

A defening sound

I believe you mean deafening sound.

This poem really shows how you care about someone and how sad you would be if you lost them.

The flow is alright, it could be better. 4/5

Conceptually it is mildly difficult to follow in that the subject seems to switch a lot, i don't know that your use of "blitzkreig" is apt for the situation, but maybe im interpretting the poem wrong. I like that its succinct, and it flows relatively well. The ending was fairly good, but rather than posing the question at the end, i mightve said something like "now i drift and ponder my death", in order to tie it back to the beginning, but honestly thats my stylistic choice speaking, and if that doesnt conform to your ideas then i can go to hell lol. still though, good work.

Well,for me,the poem was good and brought up clearly how and what the write feels and a touching one....!!!

Good work....:))

Good poem, sad but well written and filled with emotions that many could relate to...GP