Comments : Derelict Cretins delivered

  • 8 years ago

    by L

    This is a well thought poem, Its short compare to other poems I've seen from this author but it has a message well conveyed.
    I have to admit that I sense a humorous tone in this poem but that's what I like the most about it.

    " doodling their driveling daydreams" lol.

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is funny lol

  • 8 years ago

    by Decayed

    A great alliterative piece. It talks about something common in PnQ... well, with your sense of humor the vibes are there, and so are the concealed messages :)

    Great job.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Its great, I love the alliteration:)

    Dreams delivered,
    from a dashing dude called JANIS, who finally brought
    deliverance to this derelict band of donnish drunks
    doodling their driveling daydreams
    and dangling dilettantish muses
    on a doozy domain called PnQ.
    this is my fav part:P hhhh that means all of it.
    Ofc a 5/5