The follower
by Erion Dec 13, 2011
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I follow you into light and darkness |
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14 years ago
by Erion
Thank you for your comment and voting! if you have any other suggestions, i'd love to hear them!
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14 years ago
Really short, but I love the message and flow!
So simple, and yet it has such a strong message. I'd consider changing one thing, however. And that's the "the" in the first line, if you remove it you'll have the same flow, and you'll have it grammatically correct as well. Since now it'll pretty much require a "the" before darkness as well, and with that you'll ruin some of the flow.
Great job, keep it up!
