Comments : As Difficult as it sounds - In my bed the demons play

  • 8 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    Just a side note:

    Darkness surronds my bed whispering in my ear saying I wish you were dead,

    I'm sure you caught this already just haven't had the time to go back and edit. Surrounds.
    Alright enough of being a Nazi!
    You definitely have a rhyming way to your poems and it makes them enjoyable.

    Suicide poems, or self-hurt poems are always hard to comment on, for me atleast.
    Always gotta remember to keep your head up.
    Band-aids are better than razors in my experience.
    I try to fight off the demons of my past but to no avail,

    They always do the same things that cause me to fail,

    Torturing my mind, saying no one loves me,
    ^^^ these three lines make it for me atleast.

    Good job but smile :) 5/5

    • 8 years ago

      by TheDarkCloudBehindthePoet

      Thank you Blood of a Lion. Band aid are better than razor blades my friend. Trying to keep my head above water. I'm glad you like my poem. Ill try to make them better and take advice. Thank you BoL :)