Comments : Life and Death [vent]

  • 11 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    As a vent it was helpful I'm sure but as a poem it's a winner. The first stanza held me closely to read more. It was true and precise, filled with emotion.
    Vent or not this was excellent

  • 11 years ago

    by Jad

    A very interesting poem that gave me a ton of things to think about. The many questions you have asked and proposed are hard ones to answer and understand. I get the logic of what you are trying to say and also the underlying message in the poem. Is there more to life in death and does one gain more from one or the another. od course this is just my view of it and I would like to think that there are many views of this poem and the one that probably fits best is the one you were thinking of.

    I couldn't find one line that really stood out to me because I found that all the lines were flowing one after the other and they were all connected caring your main message. I agree with this being a vent but you have poetically released these emotions and feelings that you have been holding inside and also the ideas and thoughts that have been in your head.

    All in all, I found this to be a very thought provoking poem that had a good central message and queston. The poem had a strong opening as said above that made me think and want to read more. I am glad to see you release these feelings if it only is as simple as a vent. Great job and keep writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Simply breathtaking piece. I remember myself being surrounded with so many questions but then life overtook and i am too busy to spend time with myself anymore or with my thoughts.
    It was like talking to myself once again and trying to solve this simple riddle of life with so complexed rules.
    Just loved it friend.

    Glad that you released.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    //you either live with dignity to die without
    or die with dignity because living dignified,
    proved too difficult.

    // woww very different thoughts. Loved the play of words here.