Comments : Young love

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Oh Yaki, I could so relate to all of this,

    It reminded me of my first love, how he made me feel and the fact that I miss "Us" not just him but all the things we did and the memories we made

    This was a really sweet if sad poem

    Very nice
    love
    Tara
    xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Nominated, no bet! Will comeback with a proper comment.

    EDITED:

    Lovely, tender, emotional and moving.

    The worst part after a break-up is the memories, when you certainly know you won't be able to have them, yet you cannot stop remembering! I LOVED how you expressed this idea. The ending was marvellous, took me to another realm! I missed your poetry, twin. I truly missed it.

    This better wins the next week.

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Lovely and wonderfully written I loved it great job 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Moodii Evanescence

    Nice One , Sensual :)

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awwww... this poem was so sweet and adorable... I think there's something special about young love, and you expressed the feelings so beautifully.

    This part was so beautiful and like a breath of fresh air:

    when the air would be so thick
    with love,
    I could barely see
    beyond the softness
    of your flesh and
    feel anything other
    than your hand
    in mine..

    >> sooo sweet! I love how the air is filled with love.

    I love the ending... I can relate to that. Not just missing a person, but missing the both of you and how things were that time.

    Beautiful poem <3