Yup, this poem make me think that the rich take advantage of those who doesn't have. But everyone is the same because we are humans and so they can be rich at the moment but later on who knows. Also they can have as much money but still be unhappy. Either way, I enjoyed reading this piece. Well done.

Good job paul.(:

That first stanza is priceless. Really opens up the piece well. Keep writing dear. -Nik

Paul, this is an awesome write. One could really relate to it...if could read between lines.

Just loved these stanzas as to me they speak far more than what appears:

Intertwined in my mind are
dreams and hopes of making it big,
only to be crushed by the realities
of this wicked world

I live it all in the hands of destiny
For no matter your wealth
you are just human and so will
fall victim to time

I have seen the cycle of life and i have seen rich man falling, its really painful but then it also reminds the beauty of nature's law. Its better to be scared all the time, as you are being watched. Do no sin and you wont deal with any.

Great write...loved it.

all the best and take care

Ya everyone is the same, we're all humans no matter how we differ, we all started in the same way, and we'll end in the same way:)

Great poem Paul, ofc 5/5:)

Awesome poem Paul!

I love the first stanza - your mind as a fortress blocking all the hopes and dreams that you have - the ones you feel will never come true.

It is such a sad world at times when the people have to work so hard to get ahead in life. Our dreams crushed by others - like the richer getting richer and poorer getting poorer. Completely sad

Awesome write!

x

So true in so many ways.Excellent write.

/My mind is a fortress
of un lived realities
//
liked the imagery of mind as a fortress filled with dreams and realities.

/For no matter your wealth
you are just human and so will
fall victim to time
//
very true, we come into this world alone and we will go alone. None of our accomplishments, our treasures will accompany us. beautifully said.

Amazing it makes me smile and has great depth so well fix the live to leave and it will be perfect well done sir 5

Very true indeed. Your poems are mostly centred around rights and the ills occuring in our societies. I so much liked the ending part; 'you are just human and so will, fall a victim to time'. No matter the wealth one amass; its just a pile of paper if its not meant to serve humanity. Simple and straight to the point. Very educative as well, SUPERB poem written from the heart. God help us all, God give us God fearing, responsible and diligent leaders, Ameen. Stay blessed, Kudos!

I really liked the opening stanza, it really pulled me in... I like the imagery you created.

It made me sad to read about the dreams of making it big and how they are crushed... I always feel disappointed if someone does that to me!

The last stanza was sad... but also reminded me of the way we feel sometimes... and how everything can get us down.

Good job with this poem :)

With enough "will" you can shape your own destiny.
Rather then waiting for destiny to find you. Failure cannot cope with persistence!