Comments : A smile

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    I like the content a lot, but he some things need to be fixed :)

    - Capitalize all the 'i' s

    - what instead of wat

    - and the last two lines do not seem poetic, so here is an edition to them.. especially this: his/her ...those shouldn't be like this.

    Ok, so here is the edition:

    Such a smile is what anyone would wish,
    a smile that welcomes you
    when you wake up...
    It is then that you realize
    there will be another happy day.

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    Lovely oiece.