Comments : Help Me

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachit Bhanage

    Hmm...that was a good write! Initiating with the dilema,U describe the lingering want nd delicate state of mind at times of edge....loved it !

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Hun,

    Sometimes it can be really hard to ask for help. I think this poem really shows your vulnerability but it also shows your strength.

    I know I can relate to this poem also.

    I hope that you get the help that you are writing about x

    Well done!

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    God is our refuge and strength. Beautiful poem

  • 12 years ago

    by Captain Lonesome

    Another wonderful, heartfelt poem!! Sincere, true, and simply amazing display of the desire for the guidance we all need at certain times in our life!! Great job!! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    There is only one place for guidance and peace. You have penned that with perfection. Excellent

  • 12 years ago

    by Renegade Angel

    I love the poem, because of the essence you show, as well as your soul is pouring out into the stanzas. this emotion is very heartfelt.

    if there is any help any of us can gove you, we'll be there. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Bobby

    It is beautiful the writing, the meaning and the way one can feel the emotion

  • 11 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    I think you have written a beautiful prayer, from your heart...something that should not go un-noticed by Him. But, as we ask his to be stronger, we have to also remember that God helps those who are willing to first help themselves. Those who at least make the effort...to be strong, to take the first steps themselves to step on the path to their own salvation. Those who rely on Him for everything are likely to be disappointed. To make the first attempts to dig out of your own "blues" or "follies" shows resolve, conviction and courage. So one should rely less on "others", significant or not, to pull us out of the hole we gug ourselves in, for that can only be detrimental in the long run...i.e. will create dependency on others in bad times. So, I think you have projected some touching thoughts very well, which many can relate to, but do not know where and whom to turn to. The most poignant lines to the reader are:

    "Reasure me that I don't need a guy
    Especially to be happy

    Determination to bring my own life to rise"

    Congratulations on the first step!

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This is beautiful. The simple choice of words made this more sincere and heart-felt. Well done!
    "Reasure me that I don't need a guy"
    Reassure
    "Help me conquer that desires
    are not the same as dreams,"
    ---I suggest you revise this to: "Help me conquer that my desires are not the same as dreams," but I think 'conquer' is chosen clumsily. It would be better is it was 'believe', just a suggestion, though.
    "there totally two different things"
    ---change 'there' to they're or they are
    Overall, a wonderful piece. Keep writing
    -X