You have a few errors here...grammar wise but...I just loved this one so much I'm overlooking them right now....if you have the chance...go back and edit this one..still...I'm nominating it...it was lovely... sad as a mayfly's last journey...

Thanks hellon i will try hard to correct it. .

Weekly contest, judge comment:

A powerful poem that I may have scored higher save for a coupe grammatical errors, in fact I normally discount poems for the weekly contest if they have such, but I found this poem quite unique in the way it has been constructed, it's almost like they were planned ,adding to the character of the piece intentionally or otherwise (other than suchthoughts). Yes the purists may disagree, but in this instant I bask in the purity behind this poem..

Great poem