I can't even begin...to compete or...compare!! This is mind-blowing...!!! Thought-provoking, to say the least. Epic, to say the best ^_^ I admire your work, this style seems so new. The unfamiliarity intruiges me, captures my curiousity! You show so much talent, so much potential It's like a mind-game on steroids -giggles- I love it, I love it. You MUST keep writing, Clever, Clever. I'll need to read this a couple hundred more times, for sure. :)
A-mazing!! KEEP. WRITING!!!
10 years ago
by Moonlit Candles
I thought this was a really cool poem. loved the use of imagery here with flowers. nice write
I rarely come across a poem where I don't capture exactly what it is about before I have finished reading. But this particularly poem was hot to cold and oh so contradicting. Upon my second read, I truly understood how it made me feel and when a poem can allow such an emotion to befall you, well, I believe you have a winner here.
I really really enjoyed this piece. About the only thing I'd change is turn the stanzas into ones where the rhymes are at the end of each line instead of having two lines of the stanza in one... Other than that, its amazing! 5/5