I really really love your use of personification throughout the whole poem. You made it unfold like a story, so filled with emotion. A few parts are a little hazy, but its probably because im not thinking straight. Either way, I loved it through and through! 100/100! Loved it!

Your talent never runs short its like a river that never stops flowing. Once again you breathe life into poetry and continue to amaze good job indigo child

Wow, Ashley...you really nailed it on this one.
Excellent writing.

This reminds me of my friend telling me that the only way to know you're still living is when you cut. I'm not saying anyone should, though.. This just reminds me of her. Really miss her. Great job on this piece 5/5 Keep writing :)

-X

Good choice of words and the imagery is nice, too. Though this poem is about suicidal...but your words conveys what the feeling and the emotion of the persona. Good rhymes and thoughts. Great work:))
5/5

Your imaginary is so impressive
Something so sad so beautifully illustrated

Ashley, it is the sadness here that really pains me, and the emotion that grasps my heart and pulls at my strings...

I can understand this poem and understand the feelings that you penned, it breaks my heart to read your pain and I just hope that you can one day let go of it and find a healthier way of coping ...

love always
x

Ashley

This is excellently written - it left me....itching my wrists!
All the very best
Ben

Sad and painful with such wonderful imagery. A very impressive piece of writing.