Awfull poem, good but sad
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This poem is very depressing and emotion rips through every stanza. I love how you gave this piece so much feeling.

"Some days are blue
Days of blue mindset
Days of dripping tears
Down the cheeks
Dripping on my blouse"

Loved how you opened the poem. You got stuck right in and set the tone of the poem immediately.

"Days of sadness
Where a spot of tears
Does not matter
Love is absent

I am waiting for a life
Had once had a wife
Sitting on a Sunday alone
Waiting for Monday dawn"

^ These next two stanza really pulled me in. You kept them simple yet they mange to impact the reader straight away.

"Tears are dripping of loneliness
Life will start some day
Kind people wish a good weekend
There's are not 24 plus 24 plus 16 hours"

^ I love how you spoke of time as so many of us get court up in the moment we forget to see the whole day and how long pain can last in the mind.

"My weekends is like a voluntary prison
Life is at standstill in weekends
Nothing moves even the rain is still
I have to do something"

^ This was my favorite stanza as I felt it was the most moving. The way you spoke about life feeling like it is standing still is heartbreaking.

"Soon it is Monday
And I have social life again
At least it feels like that
Until Friday comes with tears... "

^ Your final stanza is very fitting and it reminds the reader that the pain in the poem isn't a one off thing and that it is part of a cycle".

Excellent

5/5

Aww this poem is trully sad:(

But wut I like abt, that its differen, we all wait for weekends to rest and enjoy, but here its different, u feel alone and sad, need someone to be with u.

Great poem Ole:)

Aww this poem is trully sad:(

But wut I like abt, that its differen, we all wait for weekends to rest and enjoy, but here its different, u feel alone and sad, need someone to be with u.

Great poem Ole:)

Hi all
Thanks for your more than kind comments.
feelings is a tricky thing, I reversed the week to keep the solitude in focus, I hope I managed
And no I'm not that sad, myself
love you all

I can relate to your words my friend.Great piece.

This was a very sadly penned poem. . . i know we feel this way at times, some more than others, or we have our own solitude that we don't like and you did a nice job describing yours....

you're a good poet.. good job :)

Hi Karla and Fly Away
Thanks for your fab. comments and I feel your comments as very positive and supportive

Aww this is so sad, I really hope this isn't your life. Just reading this piece makes me feel blue. This is a good write despite how sad it is, good poem..

Hi Autuumnbree

The feeling here was mine after a divorse, but not anymore
life is hard sometimes, as we first feel when we ar in the situation