As deep as it is profound, loved how the acrostic phase ties so perfectly with the poem. I really dig how the poem ended in one word. "DEATH"

it was a slam dunk of and ending to a grand poem.
all of your poems are amazing.

It has been a long time since I last read one of your poems.

But I am glad that I read yours after such a long leave of absence from P & Q. The flow is excellent as well as your choice of words.

Very nicely penned. Keep up the good work!

Good Stuff! The topic is Classic! And the imagery of the pills as hands reaching out, clever! The heart palpitating the restlessness, death all great stuff!

This poem is intense! What a powerful and in depth Acrostic- the author of this piece has a raw and in your face approach about this subject and I love it! From start to finish, it drew me in and held me captivated.

Title: I like that she chose this saying as a title... Because she brings the saying to life and gives it reality... So many people say this in a sarcastic tone... but the truth of it is, lack of sleep can lead to death and it's not so funny when reality smacks you in the face.

First stanza: I adore this stanza, it confirms the value of sleep, the need to nurture the body, and her ending line "Like stars do when they're not shining" <-- Oh how cute is that saying!!! I sat there and actually said out loud, aw they do sleep, during the day of course, ha ha, but loved this closing line!

Second Stanza: Now the author has explained to me how the insomniac is feeling, very descriptive and allows me a wonderful visual. There is so many distractions that are blocking sleep, and again the ending line just snaps! "Pills on a nightstand stretching out their helpful hands" <- excellent metaphor- I pictured a bottle of sleeping pills whispering "I'm here to help you silly, take me"- and seeing these little hands waving from each side of the bottle...

Third Stanza: Guilt and turmoil can eat away at the mind and within this stanza it sings true... excellent display of word usage here, using whispers again is the mind playing tricks and wearing down the body's natural desire to sleep.
Fourth Stanza: These two lines are powerful... awesome visual display!
Fifth Stanza: Applauds!!! Excellent ending here- I can hear the heart beating fast, see the sweat pouring from the face and feel the turmoil, almost inviting death- Wonderful ending stanza!

Ending Comment: I love acrostics that flow, and hold you on the edge of your seat, and this poem did that and more. I felt like I was actually watching the person fight the demons within and trying to sleep. Now that is powerful word usage right there folks!!!!!!!!!!! - Well Done Chelsey

This took my breath away. I've noticed that you outdone yourself in the times I wasn't here.

I haven't read acrostic poetry in a long while, but I do remember how extremely hard it was, probably of the hardest forms in my personal opinion.

I love poems about dreams/sleep. Your ending was the climax just as it should be, even more, I'd say. Good choice for the title as well by the way. Absolutely brilliant.

Thank you for writing this!
Write on~

Nicely written,
Thanks for sharing.

That 100% true . Like your poems. I'll keep reading. Not tonight. Very interesting.

" I'll sleep when I'm dead".... is my saying I use on a daily basis, as I don't sleep much; Reflecting on my basic day or some event which took place.... & there's inner demons!

which in turn intrigued me to see what you had to write?,..
In all, I enjoyed the read but I found "WHEN DEAD" to be cleverly worded!!

"Whispers torturously dancing on the inside of the eardrum
Hoping they'll realize soon, it isn't an instrument
Evidently, rest must only come to the innocent
Not the ones who wrestle with guilt in the midnight hours"

"Drowning in frustration, palpitations take over the heart
Emitting painful stings, delivering heaviness to the chest
Arriving to the realization, one thing will bring sleep-
Death"

5/5

This piece is one of your best so far, now don't get me wrong cause you have many more, but there is something about this one specifically that just make it stand out more...

Indescribably creative and beautiful.

Ahh, Chelsey here I think I'm reading a nice little acrostic poem about sleep, suddenly not feeling guilty for doing too much of it, and then Bam! You hit me right at the end with Death!

I guess you are describing a heart attack in the last stanza. But I was having palpitations last night just from too much coffee ....

Beautiful Poem.