WOOWWWW....I usually hate repetition in poems but I loved this!! i loved what you did by repeating the first line, it gave it such meaning every time you said it...Your words were so elegant and beautiful! I loved this! :)

Hi,northern sister, this is a good piece and i've read it more than twice but i seems not to get the theme clearly. Nevertheless,it's a beautiful piece.

Amazing..really amazing..Your style in this piece is brilliance and like i said, your choice of words and your knowledge in them has always captivated me. You are a great writer, and am really proud to be African just reading your work.

I don't think I ever read a poem that had so much yearning in it..well done on the words you have chosen.

5/5 Ingrid

Woooooooooooooow!!

I love it Yakori, I so love it!!
My forte was always writing love songs, and I got to say that I give that to you now. I loved the repitition in it, it actually gave it an extra melodical flow.

Well done sis :)

This is so beautiful, words so well chosen
excellent

Very lovely poem...

At the banks of the shore.
In just few minutes;
red and blue missed each other. ..

I really liked how you ended this piece, i never expected that. As usual, where do you find your words?..they are amazing and well placed.