Comments : Lace Your Lips With Mine

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    It made me smile as I was reading it. I can see that you are incorporating rhymes in the stanzas. That added a melody to it. Pretty good. I'm still smiling. :D

    EDIT: not pretty good, amazing!

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    I simply loved it and adding French made your piece super charming. You are a Goddess too Liz!

  • 12 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Wow! The title pulled me right in and I was hooked after that!! You love your fella to your core and it showed in this blissful piece I love love loved it!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Awwwwwwwwwwww Liz--- I just got goosebumpy!!!! that made me melt..... such a beautiful poem...it flowed like a song....sighs.... so so so so so pretty!!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Truly amazing

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Liz!!!!
    This poem made me tingle all over, It was such a sensual romantic piece and the love you have for your husband is so evident, and that comfort and stability you feel is incorparated beautifully.

    I loved that it rhymed and the flow was good, The repetition here was WOWZERS and it worked perfectly, adding that confirmation that his kisses make you feel safe.

    Liz, What else is there to say,
    but...
    You are so damn fricking BRILLIANT!!!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Hot, with the French term incorporation and well, your voice which makes the spring season cave in. Beautiful, no.. Incredible.

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    This was absolutely beautiful! I loved the title like everyone else said, so catchy, so right to the point...

    I loved how sensual and sweet this poem is, it screamed "im in love"...I loved every bit of this poem Liz! Well done!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Lace your
    lips with mine.

    wow line this is one of the best think which I read.

    keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by DarkLight

    " lean over n kiss me
    darlin lace ua lips wit mine" Lizz this culdnt pass my mind t took me off my feet deeped me into passion of fantasy..
    i love every piece of t..excelnt.
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by OrangeJuicePerez

    Beautifully written!

  • 12 years ago

    by hayet serenade

    TRULY AMAZING

  • 12 years ago

    by Victoria

    Too cute! :)
    I'm with eveyone else--
    I love how you said "lace your lips with mine." Good Write!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Beautiful and very well penned. I loved how you kept the topic light yet at the same time gave the poem depth and feeling. I loved the way this poem balances out.

    5/5