"I'm steal sad when I think about you,"
steal--still

"why did you leave so quickly,
why did you go,"
Put a question mark in the end.

"I know I will pass away someday to,"
to--too

"pleas wait for me in front of havens door."
Pleas--please
havens--heaven's

Sorry, just had to correct those errors, because without those errors, this piece is definitely flawless! I mean, the emotion is there; not too much, not too little--there's grief, yet you countered it with acceptance. I love the flow and atmosphere you've created here.. Overall a beautiful piece. When I write about pain/grief, it's coated with pain/grief all over, but your ability to put two opposite emotions, is just amazing (atleast for me) it's really hard for me to do that. 5/5 :) Keep writing!

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Sorry.. posted twice :)

Thanks

Nice work",hope to read more poem from you soon:=)good luck and god bless you always...

Greetings (:
A great string of words flowing like the water(: :P
A great work i liked it! 5/5
keep writing (:

Thank you very much :D

NIce.thats the same way I feel these days.

At first I thought this was about a boyfriend or girlfriend until it got closer to the end. This is a sad and emotional writing. Im sorry for your loss. :( 5/5:)