Comments : Ness (Birthday Poem)

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Lol, thank you!
    It's not my birthday but phew, I sure felt like it was. You are right we should smile and don't think that we are aging. We should just feel happy about it. I mean it means that we have live one more year.

  • 11 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Wow..I will dedicate this to myself on my bday. This is a very inspirational poem to someone for their birthday. Very well written

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This is a really sweet dedication. I hope you let that person read this. My only advice perhaps is the placing of periods in the end of each line, making some lines sentence fragments. Other than that, great piece. You not only managed to write it for that person, but anyone who reads this would feel the emotion you've put here for that person. Keep writing :)
    -X